We have be doing some narrative I did it about the magic mirror
Ding a ling a ling the school bell rings. In class today not many people were there. It was very weird. My best friend was there, Annalise and Alysha are bff.
When the bell rang the class went to sit on the mat. Miss Clifford did the roll and the notices then she told us what to do for our writing. Annalise and Alysha went on the spinning chairs to do their writing. Miss Clifford told Annalise to go find some cardboard. She said it is in the classroom somewhere. So I looked everywhere. The only place I haven't looked is the top cupboards. We are not allowed to look in there but i did. “You won't believe what I found” said Annalise “I FOUND!!!!!! AN old dirty mirror” said Annalise very loudly. Miss Clifford turned around and said don't touch that mirror but Annalise touched the Magic Mirror and got sucked into the roblox game. But Alysha wanted to be with me so she touched the Magic Mirror and Alysha transported in the exact same place I did. Then we looked and we found a note “Hi look who i have found you need to complete this game and it is don't
VERY WELL DONE ALYSHA. You have worked well with Annalise on the ideas for this. I see you did not get it finished. Maybe if you wrote a bit less and got your main ideas from the plan written in, then you could go back and add detail. You lovely writing just needs to be made into paragraphs so it is easier to read. Find places where you can add a couple of blank lines. Ka pai for your hard work as usual!!
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