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Thursday, March 25, 2021

Alysha the present

In writing we have been writing a story about the present it was  4 days that we finished our writing and I hope you enjoyed mind. 

Last week I was playing Fortnite at home with my friend Shikya. It was my  favourite game to play. We love it all the time.

 Then my  Mum came home and put a big box on the table. I

 paused the game and opened the box and inside the box was a puppy. The puppy had only three legs. I  was disgusted. Then I had a weird feeling about the puppy and I threw the puppy on the ground and kept playing  Fortnite.

Then the puppy came to me and wanted me to throw his ball.

I did not want to throw it, but then when he kept coming to me I picked the ball up and I threw it into the boxes. The puppy  ran into it. Then the boxes fell on the puppy.  I started to like the Puppy because it is and I have one and the puppy only had three. I thought it was adorable, I wanted to play with the puppy outside. I told my mum that we were going outside to play.





  









 





      



  



 







3 comments:

  1. Hello Alysha.
    I'm glad that you ended up liking the puppy.My mum had a dog that only had 3 legs.He was hit by a car and one leg needed to be amputated.
    People were mean to him and started calling him names so I felt sad for your puppy.
    I'm glad the story had a happy ending.
    What colour was the puppy and did you give it a name?.

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  2. Nice structure Alysha. You have described the main ideas of the recount very well. Ka Pai. I have fixed up all the extra spaces in your writing. It is just the formatting when you copy, shift and paste.

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  3. Hi Alysha
    You did good. good job i like you wow words you did some good felling to that added in to the story.

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